Little Black Riding Hood
Once upon a time there was a girl called Little Black Riding Hood. She asked her dad if she could go visit her Uncle Caleb and Cousin Leroy but her dad said, “no.” So Little Black Riding Hood ran away into the dark, deep, creepy, scary woods. Her brother ran after her.
Cousin Leroy and Uncle Caleb lived in a castle at the beach that was one hour walk away. As she walked along the path, she saw bananas, apples, oranges, pears, kiwi fruit and lemons. She went to pick some fruit when Little Black Riding Hood realised she didn’t know where the path was.
Suddenly a dwarf called Ethan saw Little Black Riding Hood and helped her by telling her where the path was. Then he asked her where she was going. She said, “To my Uncle Caleb. He is the King and Cousin Leroy, he’s the prince. They live at the beach in a sand castle.”
After that the Ethan told her the long way to the beach, then he went to tell the witch and the dark knight. The witch got an army of pigs.
Ethan, the dwarf and the dark knight went the short way but by then Little Black Riding Hood was already there.
Little Black Riding Hood told her Uncle Caleb about her trip over here. When Little Black Riding Hood told him about the dwarf Ethan, King Caleb fainted. When King Caleb woke up he told Little Black Riding Hood that the dwarf called Ethan was their enemy. Little Black Riding Hood she fainted as well!
King Caleb and Prince Leroy went out looking for a army of predator. They saw lots of animals coming towards the castle. They rode back to the castle as fast as they could.
Meanwhile, Little Black Riding Hood and her friend, Briahna were playing outside the castle in a tree house. All of a sudden Little Black Riding Hood saw an army of pigs in the air. Briahna had a shot gun and Little Black Riding Hood had a BB Rocket Launcher that follows the target.
She saw Ethan the dwarf flying towards them looking very angry and moody. Briahna and Little Black Riding Hood ran as fast as cheetahs back to the castle. King Caleb and Prince Leroy were back. When Little Black Riding Hood told King Caleb that Ethan was coming, King Caleb fainted again!
Little Black Riding Hood and Briahna got their weapons and King Caleb and Prince Leroy got their swords. They went out to fight. The goodies killed all the baddies. Little Black Riding Hood killed Ethan the dwarf. The pigs were defeated.
Little Black Riding Hood and her family lived happily ever after.
By Caleb
1 comment:
Caleb, I really enjoyed reading your fractured fairytale. You enjoyed our Fairytales unit and this shows in the enthusiasm of your writing. You have worked well towards achieving the learning intention which was to rewrite a known fairy tale using the elements of narrative writing. You used the success criteria to help you create an entertaining fairytale. I particularly like the imaginative elements of your fairytale...the army of pigs and the BB Raocket Launcher! Your next step is to work on including more language features such as similes in your writing and ensuring that your story flows and makes sense as I helped you with this during the editing and revising phase of your story.
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